Please give an opinion on the beginning of my book!?

This is the beginning of the first book in the series I am planning to write. It is about a boy and a girl who are infatuated with each other, and neither knows of the other ones devotion. They both have the minds of writers, therefore percieve the world in a different light to normal people. Please give your opinion and be nice because I am only 12, and only just beginning to get into writing. Also could you please give some ideas on what you think the series should be called, and what the three books should be called. If you want ideas on the other books, just say and I will post my planning sheet for the series. Thank You!